Writing a recount

Learner: Sally                                             Date: 6th September, 2016 Learning Coach: Margaret Patrick           Narrative Assessment Learning story

Learning Area: Writing a recount  -Literacy

Learning Observed

Sally was writing a recount (using  language symbols and text) about the fashion extravaganza she participated in during iExperience during Week 7.  We collaborated exploring a recount planning sheet and the layout of the various sections and discussed the special features of using past tense and time markers for the body of the recount to show the sequence of events in a chronological order.  Sally used the  planner then wrote her story. I used a recount rubric to mark her story to provide formative assessment feedback prior to her formal assessment in Week 9. She scored 10/25  I was really pleased with her effort. Her writing was presented as a story in 2 paragraphs with a title.  She used the time marker “Last week” to start her introduction. She is using “Subject-verb-object” (SVO) to compose simple sentences. Currently she is inconsistently using capital letters and full stops to punctuate her sentences. There was evidence of self correcting. She had an ending to her story and also wrote a personal comment. Sally’s  vocabulary is growing. She is excited about writing during “Quick Writes” that happen every day after iBreak 1. She is building up her high frequency words.

Evidence of learning

Next Learning Steps

Sally  needs to Always use  CAPITAL “I” when representing the first person pronoun instead of “i”. Continue to add adjectives to make her writing interesting especially adding   colour adjectives before the noun. Start using “and’ as a conjunction.